Too Different

This story has very simplistic writing, which can be a pro or a con depending on what you're looking for in your reading. However, the bigger problem is that there's no charm in the storytelling. I've read many fics that weren't skillfully written but were still compelling because of other things like vivid imagery, and endearing characterizations. Those are some things this story is severely lacking in. I'll detail what I did and didn't like, but be warned that there are spoilers. [b] Pros: [/b] [list] [*]The simplicity of the writing DOES make it accessible to people of all reading levels and to readers beyond sci-fi fans. There aren't many confusing science-y words to look up, if any, making it easy to understand the story. [*]There are some genuinely nice and/or wholesome interactions with other characters. I especially liked the MCs conversations with the sassy AI and interactions with the Were people. [*]This story provides LGBTQ+ representation. [/list] [b] Cons: [/b] [list] [*]This could've used more drafts. There are some errors that could've been prevented with more editing and revising. One of the big ones I've seen is two characters speaking in the sa…

The story is rather rushed and somewhat poorly written. Sorry, Author.

First, I'll start by saying, Yes I would recommend this to those who enjoy these sorts of games. Mind you there's some things that need work and attention paid to by the writer, but nothing that will ruin the experience for the reader. Now then on to the bits and pieces of my review, as it were. The story is interesting, with a some what strange beginning to it that slowly morphs into a more interesting read. Its very hard to talk about without doing the spoilery bit, but you as the MC do end up traveling in a manner of speaking, and wind up visiting some interesting places and characters. The first place you visit is the most indepth, with the most interesting characters to get to know and interact with. Also where that first place winds up being is determined by an earlier decision you make regarding your parents. Each place is unique but I felt that the time spent and the people you can interact with in the subsequent areas was quiet a bit lacking. You are barely there long enough to even begin to get a feel for the place, before your asked what you think of it and then are whisked off to the next one. This next bit is for the author / developer and since there is no wa…